Its a bit hard to give an opinion on your track when I can only listen for 2 mins, dunno if u had upload probs here or whatever...
But i can say that I think it strikes out on the beat part, the drums are not really doing there job, I wanna feel a faster beat, it feels a bit slow and stiff right now.
The tune could have become so much more if u would have taken a bit more time with it, but right now it feels unfinised as it is.